1. Revising the Thesis Statement:
Draft of a thesis:
The title of the book Freedom Summer is very important because it relates to freedom that Joe and John Henry wanted.
To revise the thesis, ask yourself:
- Does it accurately and specifically state my point of view/claim on the text?
- Does it provide a clear overview of my essay?
- Does it provide reasons?
After writing a draft of your essay, revisit the thesis and make it more specific.
Here is a finished, revised thesis:
The title of the book Freedom Summer is significant because it refers to an important point in the Civil Rights Movement and shows the hopeful possibility that Joe and John Henry can have the freedom to do the same things together.
2. Revising the Body Paragraphs:
Make sure there is textual evidence in each body paragraph.Ask yourself:
- Does this evidence best prove my point?
- Did I choose the most important part of the quotation?
* Now, reread your essay. Underline the thesis and textual evidence. Revise these parts of the essay.
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