Please, please, please proofread! I am seeing a lot of careless mistakes in your writing, mainly in the following areas:
Consider the following run-on sentence:
“Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate” and “she dribbled down the court herself” are both independent clauses—each could stand on its own as a sentence. A comma is not enough to join two independent clauses together. There are various ways to correct a run-on sentence:
1. Divide it into separate sentences separated by periods.
Example: Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate. She dribbled down the court herself.
2. Use a comma + a coordinating conjunction: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so (mnemonic device: FANBOYS).
Example: Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate, so she dribbled down the court herself.
3. Use a semicolon and a transitional word or phrase such as: however, moreover, furthermore, as a result, consequently, meanwhile, first, next, finally, or in addition.
Example: Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate; consequently, she dribbled down the court herself.
from: http://teacher.scholastic.com/scholasticnews/magazines/scope/pdfs/SCOPE-REPRO-021411-15.pdf
Activity: Here are some sentences from student blogs. Please write the sentences correctly in your notebook. Note why you made the corrections you did.
1. i currently finished the book Groosham Grange by Anthony horowitz. I read this book because i really like the books that i read by Anthony, but this book is kinda different from what i read before.2. The main character in my book is in the middle of a revolution she is lost not knowing what to do.3. ive noticed that a lot of the book is about his memories. They seem to have a great signifigance in his life and play a really importiont role in the book. you know how people say that their life flashed right before there eyes moments before they get into a car accident?
Application: Now that you have reviewed some important writing skills, reread your reading response and proofread it. Correct your mistakes.
* Read your writing aloud to help you!
* Also try reading your writing backward to catch your mistakes and fix them.
For your sentences, if you have no run-ons, great! However, work on varying the sentence structure in your writing. Experiment with alternating between short and long sentences. Work on the overall pacing and fluency.
- capitalization: first word of a sentence, proper nouns, I, main words in any title
- writing about texts: underline or italicize title of book, not both; use quotation marks for titles of shorter works such as articles, short stories, poems, etc.); do not underline author's names (Ex. To Kill a Mockingbird by Harper Lee; "The Drummer Boy of Shiloh" by Ray Bradbury); refer to author by last name not just first name
- sentences: use correct punctuation; write complete sentences and avoid run-ons (see below)
- spelling: spell words correctly; use spell check and a dictionary; be careful of homophones (ex. their, there, they're)
More on Run-Ons
A run-on sentence incorrectly combines two or more independent clauses. (An independent clause is a group of words that contains a subject and verb and expresses a complete thought—in other words, a sentence.)Consider the following run-on sentence:
Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate, she dribbled down the court herself.
“Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate” and “she dribbled down the court herself” are both independent clauses—each could stand on its own as a sentence. A comma is not enough to join two independent clauses together. There are various ways to correct a run-on sentence:
1. Divide it into separate sentences separated by periods.
Example: Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate. She dribbled down the court herself.
2. Use a comma + a coordinating conjunction: for, and, nor, but, or, yet, so (mnemonic device: FANBOYS).
Example: Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate, so she dribbled down the court herself.
3. Use a semicolon and a transitional word or phrase such as: however, moreover, furthermore, as a result, consequently, meanwhile, first, next, finally, or in addition.
Example: Rosie couldn’t pass the ball to a teammate; consequently, she dribbled down the court herself.
from: http://teacher.scholastic.com/scholasticnews/magazines/scope/pdfs/SCOPE-REPRO-021411-15.pdf
Activity: Here are some sentences from student blogs. Please write the sentences correctly in your notebook. Note why you made the corrections you did.
1. i currently finished the book Groosham Grange by Anthony horowitz. I read this book because i really like the books that i read by Anthony, but this book is kinda different from what i read before.2. The main character in my book is in the middle of a revolution she is lost not knowing what to do.3. ive noticed that a lot of the book is about his memories. They seem to have a great signifigance in his life and play a really importiont role in the book. you know how people say that their life flashed right before there eyes moments before they get into a car accident?
Application: Now that you have reviewed some important writing skills, reread your reading response and proofread it. Correct your mistakes.
* Read your writing aloud to help you!
* Also try reading your writing backward to catch your mistakes and fix them.
For your sentences, if you have no run-ons, great! However, work on varying the sentence structure in your writing. Experiment with alternating between short and long sentences. Work on the overall pacing and fluency.
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